Sunday, February 24, 2013

Mermaid Wishes


i
wish
to be
more than this
more than just mermaid
trapped swimming beneath the sea waves
i wish to walk among the gardens of royalty
i wish to dance to the music of drum and guitar
to sing with the birds in spring time
bathe in the warm sun
with my all
heart soul
i
wish




The Sunday Mini-Challenge ~ 14-Liners
Today's 14 liner challenge from 'the imaginary garden with real toads' doesn't necessarily have to be a sonnet, which I'm no good at, so I have for you a 14 line Fibonacci sequence. The first 14 lines follow the Fibonacci sequence syllable wise, and the next 7 follow the sequence in reverse. 1/1/2/3/5/8/13/13/8/5/3/2/1/1


the imaginary garden with real toads

8 comments:

  1. touching piece, Wish to swim beyond limitations.

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  2. You have written a most unusually shaped 14 line poem. It has a lot of visual impact.

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  3. This is heart touching ...

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  4. Very lovely form of mermaid wishes in 14 lines ~

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  5. The structure gives this a lot of clout, and the language gives it softness.

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  6. Anonymous2/24/2013

    Excellent!

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  7. Beautiful..
    and haunting

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  8. I wish...

    That stuck a chord and I loved it and now I remember why.. Into the Woods is a musical by Stephen Sondheim - and this is a really fun song.

    Nice, you are in good company :)

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