Sunday, March 17, 2013

Haiku: Valley Stream

raging valley stream
overflows with melting snow
Spring's fury floods in




Carpe Diem Special #27, Onitsura's Valley Stream


tani-mizu ya ishi mo utayomu yama-zakura

the wild cherry:
stones also are singing their songs
in the valley stream

12 comments:

  1. Melting snow invites spring !!!

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  2. Anonymous3/18/2013

    Excellent, such power in those words :)

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  3. Amazing haiku Jenn. Love the way you have used the haiku by Onitsura to write your own. The melting snow is surely a messenger of Spring coming up.

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  4. Nothing soft and subtle about the arrival of THIS spring!

    Singing Stone

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  5. love a racing, raging stream that marks the start of spring!

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  6. Yes, so often the spring stream is raging! You caught that so well in your words!

    23:6

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  7. Oh I want that rage to come here.

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  8. Nature's rage and fury is truly breathtaking! Awesome!

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  9. Yes, I feel every bit of your haiku. The weather here. Although we were fortunate not to have the river flood. Powerful haiku.

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  10. Springs's fury, that's a new expression. Very creative.

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  11. aloha Jennifer. i like the words "flood fury" that brings a strong image to mind. cool. aloha.

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